Creative, Feminism | Posted by Lauren M on 10/23/2009

Femininity

I am the clatter of stilettos on concrete,
The sheen of glittering clothes,
Bathrooms foggy with hairspray and perfume,
The pink ribbon tangled in your hair,
Threaded between your teeth.

I am your arms the color of the moon,
Your eyes the color of the rain,
Your shaking bones disguised by sunlight.

I lurk in the shadowy corners of the makeup aisle,
In the dark recesses of the scale,
In the hidden folds of closet and catalog.

I am the five pounds
That, if lost, would make you so much more attractive.
I am the five pounds
That, if gained, would make you so much healthier.

I am the beautiful pale boyfriends you crave,
The guilty indulgence of chocolate,
The worn pages of Cosmo and Seventeen.

I will not kiss other girls if there are no boys watching.
I am not fat, but curvy.
I am not Black, but exotic.
I am not Latina, but fiery.
I am not Asian, but submissive.

The scars ground into my skin
Are shallow enough to be covered with makeup.
I am your lips the color of war,
Your jeweled eyelashes,
The pink tumors just under your skin, ready to burst.
I am your polished nails
And lacquered skin.

I am unworn lingerie,
Unwanted subscriptions to debt and poverty,
The rallying cry of the unheard.

I am a coping method,
The path of least resistance,
The revolution that no one needed,
The degradation you’ve come to love,
The small smile hiding the outrage
You never meant to feel.

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  • Hope Springs Internal @ at 12:42 pm, October 23rd, 2009

    WOW. This is is amazing. I love, love, love it!

  • Toongrrl @ at 12:46 pm, October 23rd, 2009

    Thst is so incredible. Lauren you should write for a living, you’ll just love it!!

  • JC @ at 1:05 pm, October 23rd, 2009

    I think you really nailed it with

    “I will not kiss other girls if there are no boys watching.
    I am not fat, but curvy.
    I am not Black, but exotic.
    I am not Latina, but fiery.
    I am not Asian, but submissive.”

    What’s your full name if you can share?

  • cottonstar @ at 1:19 pm, October 23rd, 2009

    very inspiring. i love to write and i also love to see other people’s creativity shine through. keep writing!

  • K8 AH @ at 2:17 pm, October 23rd, 2009

    I really loved this! It is is the first poetry in a very long time that really “spoke to me.” I get it, I feel it, it’s awesome!

  • Chelsea! @ at 7:16 pm, October 23rd, 2009

    Wow, this is just wonderful. I love it!

  • Tea @ at 9:41 pm, October 23rd, 2009

    beautiful.

    “clatter of stilettos on concrete”- great consonance, or whatever it’s called when you repeat all those “t”s. Alliteration, maybe?

  • Mara @ at 1:32 am, October 24th, 2009

    Beautiful and powerful. I love it.

  • Amy CT @ at 4:59 am, October 25th, 2009

    Beautiful.

  • Melanie @ at 11:17 am, October 25th, 2009

    It’s consonance :)

  • dare2believe @ at 11:23 am, October 25th, 2009

    just…wow! Amazing, amazing poem.

  • Lauren @ at 1:53 pm, October 25th, 2009

    Thank you all! I’m glad it made such an impact. I love writing :) For the record, my full name is Lauren Moore.

  • Maggie @ at 8:22 pm, October 28th, 2009

    I have always wondered how the femme identified feel about these kinds of statements…

  • wen @ at 2:29 pm, December 4th, 2009

    Why would you just kiss girls if boys are watching? Sounds a bit teenage to me.

  • Sars @ at 12:06 pm, December 11th, 2009

    Wen – I believe she is making a jab at the culture that has developed in which women are nothing but sexual objects and have been reduced to begging for the attention of men and boys, leading them to do things like make out with one another on the dance floor at some stupid club to get the attention of the pigs around them who only moments ago were caught up in watching the scantily clad girls dancing on the speakers making the girls who are now making out with one another upset and insecure because they’re not getting any attention…..

    yeah.

  • rockergrrrl @ at 1:02 pm, January 30th, 2010

    that was great! :D

  • Laura H @ at 3:29 pm, November 25th, 2010

    I am completely in love with those last six lines.

  • Rae @ at 4:46 pm, March 20th, 2011

    I think it has a lot of really great wordplay, but if we’re being honest, I think it’s a little shallow and the concept is undeveloped. All of this imagery is not inherently good or bad, but comes down to how the individual is motivated. An entire poem implying that these cliches are women learning to love to be degraded is, in fact, degrading women. We cannot say “You’re allowed to choose the life you want…but be aware that housewife or stripper are not valid choices that should be supported.” I can’t take a poem seriously that’s supposed to be supporting women that’s all about ripping on women who made choices you don’t agree with.

  • mya @ at 9:16 pm, March 22nd, 2011

    this is absolutely ridiculous. the writing is all right but the poem focuses on stereotypes and negative aspects of women. It does not praise strong independent women at all and is actually very insulting toward women.

  • Danielle @ at 2:48 pm, April 7th, 2011

    Would you mind if I posted this on my blog?

  • Violet @ at 5:41 pm, October 30th, 2012

    In all honesty, this poem was uncreative at best. This subject matter has been beaten into the ground. The writing barely qualifies as poetry and is more like a solid paragraph broken into bits. Also, it sounds to me that you are projecting. Many women are completely comfortable with themselves and don’t fall prey to these insecurities.

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